Shhhhhhhh
by simplerlife

Comment by sidpixel:
*Hello from Sid and the Critique Club*

I'm sorry you haven't received any comments, hopefully this critique will help

I feel for your model this pose and the hard chair on which she is balanced looks very uncomfortable and because of that it makes me too feel uncomfortable. I'm all for originality but I think a more natural pose would have worked better perhaps sat on it facing the back with her legs either side. This pose is also making her shoulder massive by comparison to her lovely face.

I like the dark background and the way your model merges into it though I would have preferred it if the white dots on her shoes had been subdued or removed they spoil the effect somewhat. I like her red gloved hand and her action with her finger but the tip is a little too close to her nose. I like the reds throughout they work well but again, with that pose everything is dominated by the shoulder and for me loses its impact.

The lighting generally works apart from the chair legs which again hamper the effect of everything merging into the background. I think some sympathetic processing on the skin would also have helped overall.

I hope my comments don't come over too negative they are meant to be an honest appraisal of my reaction to the image, keep at it… Sid

Burlesque Baby Blue
by simplerlife

Comment by salmiakki:
Greetings from the Critique Club

You got a quite decent score for this image, but of course, it probably could have done much better. The idea was great but as 21.gif FromDaRock says, the execution isn't up to scratch. Having read your notes, I understand this was a candid moment and not staged, so it explains the lack of focus. For an image on DPC to do really well, it needs to be very sharp and I think this is what is missing here.

The lighting is quite good, but the left side of the frame is a bit blown out which is distracting attention away from the model.

Overall, well done image, but could have been better with a few minor adjustments

Burlesque Baby Blue
by simplerlife

Comment by salmiakki:
double post

Message edited by author 2015-07-05 06:42:38.

Burlesque Baby Blue
by simplerlife

Comment by FromDaRock:
Let me start by saying this is a fantastic idea. I love it. Unfortunately, the execution doesn't do it justice. The mom is out of focus and the tops of curtains really take away from the image. The pattern on the curtain is kind of distracting as well. On the plus side, the lighting is good, and both your models did an excellent job. Mom's expression is perfect, as is the way the toddler is pulling the curtains.

Burlesque Baby Blue
by simplerlife

Comment by jgirl57:
haahh this made me laugh, epect this on the top :-) Very so true too!
Love it! Brought reality to life hahaha

Burlesque Baby Blue
by simplerlife

Comment by streetpigeon:
Enchantingly cute. Novel presentation wherein the blue plays an important but supporting role, which speaks for the subtly of the photographer. An heirloom.

Burlesque Baby Blue
by simplerlife

Comment by SEG:
Very cool image.

Burlesque Baby Blue
by simplerlife

Comment by oldbimmercoupe:
I had to look up "teal" - its a shoehorn color of blue. whah! great capture. 9.

Burlesque Baby Blue
by simplerlife

Comment by tanguera:
Adorable

morning goddess
by simplerlife

Comment by mariuca:
Lovely and cinematic