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08/17/2005 11:19:12 AM · #1 |
I want to receive some comments about the photo I put in the Time Capsule challenge.
During the challenge, got 15 comments, all in the way that it brought good old memories to all commenters. But not 1 comment about the technical issues of the photo.
It's disappointing to plan a photo, take the time to do it, and getting a low score without knowing what's wrong.
Thanks.
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08/17/2005 11:21:36 AM · #2 |
| I liked it and commented. I think that the people that could relate probably gave you high marks and those that didn;t know what it was probably voted lower. |
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08/17/2005 11:21:46 AM · #3 |
well, there is a lot of grain, the bracelets take away from the whole feel, thus making the shot feel like someone tried to set up a shot. There is rank shadows on the wall
sorry to be so harsh, but I was anwsering your question
Message edited by author 2005-08-17 11:22:42. |
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08/17/2005 11:25:59 AM · #4 |
Originally posted by gi_joe05:
well, there is a lot of grain, the bracelets take away from the whole feel, thus making the shot feel like someone tried to set up a shot. There is rank shadows on the wall
sorry to be so harsh, but I was anwsering your question |
Don't worry, but I think that's the way the comments should be. I'm here to learn, so I expect more comments like this.
Thanks
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08/17/2005 11:32:12 AM · #5 |
Since you asked....
One of your during-the-challenge commenters mentioned cropping differently--I think you could experiment with that. Take out everything that doesn't have to be in the photo. My first impression was that this is a cluttered snapshot.
The chest the tv is on is out of vertical giving an unsettling tippy feeling to the composition.
I would like to see a game screen on the tv rather than the selection menu. The screen image is unappealingly fuzzy.
As others have said, the lighting needs work. One of your commenters asked if you used a flash...could you have bumped the ISO to 400?
Just my humble impressions...
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08/17/2005 11:42:38 AM · #6 |
I would agree with KaDi - didn't vote on this challenge, but I would have given this a 4 or 5. It seems a little cluttered, I don't like the crop on the TV, it would have been better to get the top of the TV in the shot, and also it would have looked better with a TV from the 80's - just to give it a more authentic feel. It does look as if the TV and chest are falling over too.
Overall its a really good idea, but taken differently it would have scored better.
I probably would have got a kid in 80's clothes playing the game and taken it from behind the TV so you get the glow of the TV on the kids face. That way you don't have to worry about having a modern TV. Don't mean to be harsh, thats just my opinion.
Cheers
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08/17/2005 11:48:32 AM · #7 |
OK, I'll take a stab at it...
Let's consider what you're trying to DO with this picture; you want to show some archaic video games and deliver a sense of "gamer's nostalgia". Your delivery vehicle of choice is to show yourself interacting with your son as you show him the games.
Let's look at the image in that context: one thing that immediately strikes me is that nearly half the real estate of the picture is given over to the TV screen. Unfortunately the screen is out of focus and not all of it is in the image either. The lopping off of just a tiny bit of the TV is distinctly awkward; show it all, or crop even more out. Where it's at now looks careless, unintentional. And why, if you're going to show a game screen, have you got it frozen on a TITLE screen? You might be able to get away with that if it were in focus (Mattel Electronics has some nostalgia value), but since it's NOT in focus, and bearly readable, I'd think a more graphic screen with color, showing gameplay, would work better here.
Another thing that strikes me is how much space you've devoted to the "box", which is relatively uninteresting, although certainly a relevant part of the "story". I'd think you could have arranged things so that the game boxes, and their titles, were a stronger part of the composition and this would have been a plus. The primitive gameplay features and the old-fashined titles are potentially the most nostalgic elements of this idea of yours.
The interplay of generations (you and your son) is not coming through very strongly here; the smaller hand could easily be a woman's hand, not a child's. I can imagine a setup where the camera's on a tripod behind you and your son, and both your heads are in the picture, seen from behind; this is potentially a much more interesting approach. And even given the approach you ended up using, the bracelets on your arm (as someone else pointed out) are an anachronism, and a disturbing one.
The lighting of the whole thing is pretty blah, with a seriously ugly shadow on the drapery behind the TV, so that's an area that would have rewarded more care being paid in the setup. Also, the composition, overall, is extremely static; it's just a vertical stacking of key elements, with no dynamic flow.
Finally, the colors themselves are very drab, even sickly in some places.
In summary, it's a good idea that has been haphazardly executed. The image gives the impression that youc ame up with the idea then just rushed through making a shot without really thinking it through. When you are making "literal" images liek this, images designed to tell a story, it's important to think through every component of the shot before actually taking any exposures.
That's my take on it, anyway.
Robt.
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08/17/2005 05:54:11 PM · #8 |
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08/17/2005 06:01:13 PM · #9 |
Like Bear said: Half out of focus and poor composition.
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08/17/2005 06:07:12 PM · #10 |
Sorry Netwalker but there were constructive technical points made in your comments during the challenge. I think you should read them more carefully else those people who did comment constructively will feel their comments are worthless.
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08/17/2005 06:33:08 PM · #11 |
| To add what the others said - you have two right hands holding the controller as if they are trying to show it to the photographer. I think it would have worked much better to have someone actually using the thing. |
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