could someone please criticize this photo?

Canon EF 75-300mm f/4.0-5.6 II

12/13/2006 11:26:24 AM · #1

could someone please criticize this:

?
during the 2 last months I've been trying hard to learn PS and become better in editing. at the same time I've tried to express what I see and would like to tell. sometimes it's hard because in my head I *see* how things should look like but fail either to compose or most often to edit a photo the way I want to. this picture is the closest to what I wanted to say:)
I would really appreciate your constructive critics. maybe the composition is bad? the lighting? the pose is something stupid?
the idea is bad? the name is awful?
please, tell me what you really think.

thank you so much for looking!

Svetlana

danthesquidkid

Canon EOS-350D Rebel XT

12/13/2006 11:35:21 AM · #2

i like the shot, and the editing job

the title is a little beyond most of us.

once again, i like it, but if you really want criticism, i can always do that:

the guy's back is too noisy
his legs are out of focus
the horizontal shadow messes up the flow
his arm is overexposed (as is the rest of the picture, to a lesser degree)

last, i know you had some artistic intention in this, but i can't figure out what (and if this picture didn't have a point, it should). What made you take the picture?

Jaded_Housewife

Canon EF 17-40mm f/4.0L USM

12/13/2006 11:37:42 AM · #3

left you a comment :)

Nikon AF Nikkor 85mm f/1.4D IF

12/13/2006 11:45:13 AM · #4

thank you

danthesquidkid and

jaded_youth!
:) well, it's a girl. but it probably doesn't matter.

I wanted that horisontal shadow to cut the picture and stop the movement. and I really wanted all those noisy things to be there to distract the attention. I wanted it to look chaotic.
I agree about the overexposure and unfocused legs, I tried to find the compromise between the shutter speed, the light and the apperture. the sun was low and not very bright so I needed more light still not too slow shutter speed so I can catch the motion without blur. I guess I failed:)
the name explains it all (at least I think so:( the movement from the black and white paper ruins into the light, but it's cut in to by the shadow. it's not a good movement. it's a good try but the shadow is still there.
something like that if you wanted to know the intention.
thank you for your comment!

pawdrix

Nikon D700

12/13/2006 11:55:17 AM · #5

Originally posted by danthesquidkid:

the guy's back is too noisy
his legs are out of focus
the horizontal shadow messes up the flow
his arm is overexposed (as is the rest of the picture, to a lesser degree)

I like it for all those reasons.

The stuff in the background keeps luring my eye and the fact that it takes my eye from the main subject doesn't make sense. What is it?

magenmarie

Canon EOS-5D Mark IV

Canon EF 85mm f/1.8 USM

12/13/2006 11:56:10 AM · #6

Left a comment for you. :)

zaflabout

Nikon D300

Tamron SP AF 17-50mm f/2.8 Di II LD Aspherical (IF) for Nikon

12/13/2006 11:58:02 AM · #7

the model posture is great, and the stopped action shot is flawless, neverhteless i think the background is taking away from the image

12/13/2006 12:03:57 PM · #8

Originally posted by zaflabout:

the model posture is great, and the stopped action shot is flawless, neverhteless i think the background is taking away from the image

ok, thank you! I'll make another one with another background. it's interesting to see how it will work.

12/13/2006 12:04:15 PM · #9

Originally posted by magenmarie:

Left a comment for you. :)

thank you so much Magen! :)

12/13/2006 12:05:21 PM · #10

Originally posted by pawdrix:

The stuff in the background keeps luring my eye and the fact that it takes my eye from the main subject doesn't make sense. What is it?

thank you

pawdrix! the less the bette, I'll try another version to see.

magenmarie

Canon EOS-5D Mark IV

Canon EF 85mm f/1.8 USM

12/13/2006 12:07:57 PM · #11

Originally posted by silverfoxx:

Originally posted by magenmarie:
Left a comment for you. :)

thank you so much Magen! :)

You're welcome. I kept going back to look at it...so I realized it needed to be faved by me. :)

Fujifilm XF 55-200mm f/3.5-4.8 R LM OIS

12/13/2006 12:28:31 PM · #12

Originally posted by magenmarie:

You're welcome. I kept going back to look at it...so I realized it needed to be faved by me. :)

oh!!:) thank you so much Magen:)!

posthumous

Canon EOS-40D

Canon EF 50mm f/1.8 II

12/13/2006 02:01:02 PM · #13

Originally posted by silverfoxx:

I guess I failed:)

Keep failing. Wallace Stevens failed his poetic goals. Bob Dylan can never quite duplicate the noise he hears in his head. Emily Dickinson... what a failure!

I have not favorited this photo. I can no longer favorite your photos, there are too many to be favorited.

ursula

Fujifilm X-T2

12/13/2006 02:09:27 PM · #14

This might sound like a very silly comment, but it's what struck me when I first looked at the image, and struck me even more when I read what you were trying to show with the image: the buns are too tight, almost like squished together. If it is a spirit rising, then there should be a flow to it, this looks like too tight.

Also, to me, going again by what you wanted to show with your image, including the window is too much. Too mundane.

BTW, I think that it's probably a better idea to concentrate on your actual image making rather than PS. PS will come along as you need it. Image making is worth putting a lot of effort into.

Canon EF 28-135mm f/3.5-5.6 IS USM

12/13/2006 02:18:06 PM · #15

thank you Don! thank you so much Ursula! I'll make it differently tonight.
unfortunately ps doesn't want to come to me when I need it. I have to come to it and try to communicate with it myself.:( it just doesn't work anymore when I sit and click on everything there.:(

thank you! I will try harder.

noraneko

Canon EOS R5

12/13/2006 02:18:20 PM · #16

Left you a comment.

12/13/2006 02:19:29 PM · #17

Originally posted by noraneko:

Left you a comment.

thank you Catherine!