A 2006 Vintage Australian Wine
by arron_christensenComment by duartix: Greetings from the Critique Club ;)
* Good contrast between light/dark, subject/background.
* Not enough space for the subject to breathe. A looser crop with all the grapes included and with a bit more space on top of the bottle would benefit the composition IMHO.
* A triangular arrangement of the grapes (with the base on the table) would have been much more stable.
* A whole cluster without loose grapes would have shown more care with the setup and look more natural (this arrangement shows that is was prepared).
* Exposure is spot on.
* Focus is spot on.
* WB is spot on, I don't know if a warmer tone might have worked also.
* Lighting needs much improvement. This kind of setup craves for soft light (ideally window light). The apparent use of flash left hard reflexes on all subjects and hard shadows on the grapes.
* Interesting contrast of subjects: grapes/wine, before/after.
* A much more interesting contrast for me is an Antipodean coincidence, unfortunatelly it will escape 99.9% of the viewers. I would never guessed there was an Australian Wine based on a Portuguese grape variety (Verdelho
). BTW, I'm Portuguese. ;)
* The grapes and the wine aren't as objectively related as this is a white whine are the grapes are red.
I guess what let you down in the challenge was a combination of composition, arrangement and lighting, where the composition played a smaller role and lighting the bigger one. As you might have noticed, the competition in this challenge was fearless and the top of the pack photographers made almost no mistakes with those issues which in Still Life are paramount.
For the emotional value, I would have scored this picture between 6*-7* according to the overall level.
Keep them coming!
All the best
Duarte BrunoMessage edited by author 2010-02-21 06:11:07.