Onwards!
by Bazlord

Comment by ericwoo:
Hey there from the Critique Club

My thoughts on the image: You did a fine job meeting both ends of the challenge. You captured the into and out of very nciely. I also like the subject matter as it has a very different interest from images usually presented here. I also like your depth of field use in an attempt to hold the viewer's eye on the primary subject. There are, however, some technical and compositional flaws that I'd like to see addressed to make this a stronger image.

My ideas for improvement: Again, I like the subject matter, but I'd like to see the presentation just a bit different. The object at the bottom right of the frame is terribly distracting to my eye. I definitely need that cropped a bit better. Also, I would personally like to see a just a slight bit more space between the frame and his nose. Cropped as it is feels very tense. I also believe that the composition would have been a great deal stronger with a slight rotation in your point of view. I'd like to see the soldiers at the rear bleed over and off of the frame on the right side. Your lighting is also reversed from what you need it to be. A fill flash would have greatly helped hp;d my eye onto the primary subject rather than the brighter, busier background.

Where I would have/did score this entry: I did vote in this challenge, and this one hit me right in the middle of the road. I was one of your 71 5s for this one. There was a great deal of interest, and you did a fine job meeting the challenge well. There were just too many execution flaws in my mind's eye to pull a much higher vote from me. I think that the image, as it is, was scored fairly appropriatly by the voters.

Thank you for the opportunity to provide a critique on your entry,
Eric

A Warrior Found Wanting
by Bazlord

Comment by rooum:
I love this tryptych. Wonderful sense of abandonment and isolation. Reminds me of a J.G Ballard story. Each image works perfectly together with the blurred part of the central image cleverly giving us a voyeuristic feel. In my top three images of the challenge. 9.

A Warrior Found Wanting
by Bazlord

Comment by raish:
There's something poignant here but I'm missing a context... Has soul

A Warrior Found Wanting
by Bazlord

Comment by HarveyG:
I see what you've done here. I think. Trolley making a dash for it and then whiping out at end of pathway, last pic from it's POV lying on it's side. The white OOF border on RHS in shot 2 spoils it though. (In hindsight this may be someone sneaking a look around the corner, so bumped another one point up for creativity.)

A Warrior Found Wanting
by Bazlord

Comment by dtremain:
Interesting. I don't think this will score well, but it does tell a compelling story.

A Warrior Found Wanting
by Bazlord

Comment by rlewis:
Unless I am missing something, your images seem to lack a focus. Perhaps it is intended to be the emptiness, but I miss the point. The photographic quality is acceptable, but artistically I miss the point.

A Warrior Found Wanting
by Bazlord

Comment by EL-ROI:
Good Triptych layout. You gave an absolutely unappealing subject some interest. Your triptych tells a story. The title is a bit of a mystery...

A Warrior Found Wanting
by Bazlord

Comment by disassociation:
nice atmosphere!

Onwards!
by Bazlord

Comment by Keeper:
Sorry about first comment and the low first rate. I just misunderstood rules of the contest about having or not peoples in the frame...Anyway I will fix my mistake. Thanks for you understanding

Onwards!
by Bazlord

Comment by vexillologist:
ok