'Unwritten'
by Wellylena

Comment by karmat:
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by karmat

Compositionally, I really likewhat you are doing here. The only things I might suggest are to move the horn down in the frame a bit more. Right now, it just looks like an ornate piece of metal, and you don't really get the feeling of it being a musical instrument. Also, and this is probably just the music major in me, a pen would have seemed more realistic to me for some reason. I assume most writers do their initial stuff in pencil, but a pen just seems a bit more "artistic." Again, that may just be me.

Technically, the focus is good and the exposure is good, though I think a bit more light overall would help the details be a bit more visible.

Overall, I think you had a nice shot here. It met the challenge, I believe, and has a nice storytelling quality about it.

If I need to further clarify or explain, please do not hesitate to contact me.

karmat

'Unwritten'
by Wellylena

Comment by fattyp:
i like this. Especially the choice of using the music paper rather than just regular type.

'Unwritten'
by Wellylena

Comment by strategicthinker:
I like this photo. 1.Great tonality, 2.matches the title well and 3.imparts mood. Well done!

'Unwritten'
by Wellylena

Comment by muckpond:
this is a great idea for this challenge. it could be a bit brighter, but good job!

'Unwritten'
by Wellylena

Comment by 99Percent:
A bit too literal?

'Unwritten'
by Wellylena

Comment by EducatedSavage:
This is such a powerful composition... full of potential! I especially like the color!

'Unwritten'
by Wellylena

Comment by Tygerr:
Nice idea. Although I would have like to have seen more of the instrument, to make the connection between the staff paper and the music more apparent. Also, I think I would have preferred to remove the colour cast and leave the paper more crisply white - more 'unwritten'.

'Unwritten'
by Wellylena

Comment by phreak:
love the lighting!

'Unwritten'
by Wellylena

Comment by asimchoudhri:
it's not unwritten... it's just 4'33" by john cage ;-)

Unlit lamps
by Wellylena

Comment by emily212:
The sun is a little distracting