There's a chance that we may fall apart before too long
by Lena

Comment by fotomann_forever:
::: Greetings from Critique Club :::

Hi, as requested, here is an indepth critique of your submission.

First Impression - the most important one:
Not bad, especially for your first entry. I really have to kind of dig to make a link between the photo, the title and the challenge.

Composition:
ehh, more of a product shot type composition, nothing particularly bold about it. I think use of negative space would have helped you out a lot here. Hey, don't worry, I do these types of comps all the time, sometimes they wrok :-)

Subject:
the subject is thre, clearly defined, no missing it.

Technical (Color, focus, and light):
Color: I like the grey-scale application you've used. Works well. I'd like to see this photo sepia-toned, just to see how that might affect it.
Focus is sharp: well done.
Lighting: I'm not sure you needed that center light. It is probably the light that is creating a few hot spots around the photo.

To grow its vote?:
Bolder composition would help. A stronger link to the challenge that doesn't lean on the title usually goes a long way.

Summary:
Nice shot and score for your first entry here. Keep up the good work. Cheers.

Hope to see more from you soon,
Leroy

There's a chance that we may fall apart before too long
by Lena

Comment by TooCool:
Hmmmm... I guess I'm thick, cause I don't see the connection. Then again, I'm not sure which song this came from!
TC

There's a chance that we may fall apart before too long
by Lena

Comment by Lucky:
a bit dull

There's a chance that we may fall apart before too long
by Lena

Comment by accord:
very good concept--nice to see a sense of humour and some creativity.

There's a chance that we may fall apart before too long
by Lena

Comment by davmct:
blown highlights around the rim of the shoe

There's a chance that we may fall apart before too long
by Lena

Comment by cyan:
unusual composition adds interest. nice DOF

There's a chance that we may fall apart before too long
by Lena

Comment by e301:
It's difficult to say that there's anything actually wrong with this per se - but it isn't an appealing image, nevertheless. The total isolation of tha black background is very well done, but it really exposes any composition to close scrutiny, and this doesn't work for me: the two diagonals suggested by the shoes conflict quite a bit - being neither symmetrical nor off-centred, but somewhere between; the light, for me, is too flat to really show details of the textures that would speak of batteredness - I think that's simply the use of too much fill light - rather than the usual problem of direct flash - so that the shadows are wiped out rather more than would really be effective.

There's a chance that we may fall apart before too long
by Lena

Comment by Zigomar:
Old brown shoes could fit in well.

There's a chance that we may fall apart before too long
by Lena

Comment by Bosborne:
funny pic with the title.

There's a chance that we may fall apart before too long
by Lena

Comment by ratz:
very good.