Nocturnal discussions
by angelo75

Comment by nam:
Yep . . . "slice of life" . . . "voyeur vibe" . . . comments nailed it. Very nice.

Nocturnal discussions
by angelo75

Comment by tate:
love the mood and voyeur vibe here =)

Nocturnal discussions
by angelo75

Comment by grahamgator:
The little slice of life on the corner makes this. Nicely done.

Relax
by angelo75

Comment by sidpixel:
Hello from the Critique club

A standard image that meets the challenge to a degree

The angle you have used for your shot to some degree fulfils the challenge brief but the viewpoint fails to make effective use of the wide angle lens’ creative potential. There are some lovely curves at the base of the unit she is lying on that, if you had gone in close with that lens you could really have exaggerated together with your model in an angled view. For an example of what I am thinking of see Bill Brandt’s nudes on the beach. As it is your position is too distant it becomes more of a snapshot than an image and as with all wide angle lenses it tends to place an emphasis on the nearest parts ie., the top of the head and the arms which is neither flattering or effective. Such a wide angle lens as you have has enormous creative potential do please try some close up shots hopefully you will see what I mean.

Thanks for your entry Angelo, sorry you didn't get any comments during the challenge, I hope this makes up for it.

Presence
by angelo75

Comment by snaffles:
Greetings from the Critique Club!

This critique is a little late but ah well, better late than never. Excellent interpretation of the challenge and even better execution, which is so simple, with the big white static columns flanking this tiny dynamic figure in red. The lighting is great, no highlights blinking away and looking like bleach has been poured over the photo. The colour pop is just right and very well executed. I hope your daughter got a nice gift for helping you win a ribbon - and most fitting, a red ribbon!

Basically I cannot think of any way at all to improve this pic. It's truly lovely and I'm glad I was one of your 7s. Very well done and I hope you keep entering!

Feel free to PM me with any questions

Susan

_MG_7752 20150509 Rita 1 web
by angelo75

Comment by sidpixel:
*Hello from the Critique Club*

This is a competent portrait. The first thing I see is a lovely lady in a natural pose in an original framed setting, immediately followed, unfortunately, by a poorly finished prop.

I like your efforts to make your portrait stand out and to be more original. I also like the predominant blackness of the foreground and background against the red frame. I also like the colour of her dress and the way the sleeve hangs over the edge of the frame to break it up in a natural sort of way. And your lighting and exposure is effective.

What really lets this down in a big way for me is the visible edge of the corrugated cardboard from which the frame has been made. Its one of those 'if only' moments that once seen just completely dominates the image to its detriment. I think the 'culprit' is the light you have used to lift her hair which is also brightening that unneeded portion of the frame too. It clearly illustrates how important it is to pay critical attention to all of the detail. Whilst our brains dismiss certain aspects in the scene the camera will accurately record everything, warts n all.

I see there has been some comment made about the title, I do believe the title is an extremely important part of any image, it helps you give the viewer more information. Obviously in this case you also have the file number too which is unfortunate but you do have your title too, her name. I would never mark an image down because of it but that may well be the result simply because the viewer is missing that extra clue that will help them understand your intentions better.

Aurore
by angelo75

Comment by sidpixel:
*Hello from the Critique Club*

A very competent portrait.

The lighting is the first thing that strikes me here, very effective, you have chosen well to do this on a cloud covered day it has given your subject a nice flattering illumination. The curtains are certainly another good choice in respect of the challenge and are creating a particularly nice background. From the shadows to the highlights you have plenty of detail everywhere again thanks to the effective lighting and good exposure.

Your daughter has a nice 'mona lisa' smile that adds an engaging element to the portrait and the position of her head makes for nice modelling of her features.

I think the only constructive thought I can add here is that the portrait as it is feels as though it would probably work a little better in portrait orientation or perhaps even square, though I reckon in respect of the challenge, why you have chosen landscape to include more of the pastel curtains. I see this working well in square with the crop on the first fold after her right hand which moves her over to the right from her central position to the right third. I find the bulk of the curtains on the right rather too dominant and blocking and feel that her cropped position would greatly improve its impact.

Aurore
by angelo75

Comment by caba:
So under rated

Aurore
by angelo75

Comment by caba:
Best in show award, congrats

Aurore
by angelo75

Comment by bmartuch:
Very nice portrait, nice job on the lighting.