Points of Lightby
jonksterComment: Hello,
I saw in the scores thread you were a bit upset by your score and lack of comments. So I thought I should justify the score I gave you - which was a '4'. I sometime feel awkward doing this, as I don't rate myself high enough to really give someone else advice, so I hope its helpful rather than dismissive.
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The focus isn't sharp, look at the photos that often 'do well' here and they are TACK sharp, shallow depth of field is cool, but the most important part of the photo (the eye in this case) should be really sharp, and draw the viewer in.
The composition isn't the best - with the shadow falling down the center of the frame. Maybe off to one side would work a bit better (see rule of thirds). As it stands, the frame is very tight, this could be a very moody/emotive picture - but I can't see any expression, thus have no emotional attachment or empathy with the subject. Are they happy/sad/scared/surprised etc.
The lighting is very harsh, as a result the image is very contrasty (can't see any detail in the eye). you could try and diffuse your light, it might make it a bit more flattering. Also the purple tone doesn't add anything to the photo for me at least. It does however make it stand out from the crowd and makes a change from the 100 practically all-black photos in the challenge!
I hope it helps, and that I haven't offended you. It really wasn't my intention, I hope it makes up somewhat for your lack of comments, 13 ones and two comments isn't fair. I feel some people have lost sight of what DPChallenge is about.
Best of luck in future challenges, you have only done 6 so far, so there is all to play for!!!
Mark
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