Thinking of his Futureby
Melly8522Comment by theSaj: ::: Critique Club ::: [The Saj]
First Impressions: A touch odd and eery but at the same time kinda cute...
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Composition: Composition needs some work...a couple of aspects that detract from this shot are the following:
- subject's position, overall, is fairly centered. Not always a negative, and I believe it could have been a positive with this shot however secondary compositional elements also created distractions.
- clock is in the subject's head, creating a distraction. A moment's pause to view the surrounding area and shifting the subject slightly so as to center between the EXIT sign & clock would have improved the shot.
- ceiling seems slightly unlevel. Could be corrected by minimal rotation & crop in most photo editing software, not a major point.
- the lockers on the left side create a good infinity object for background, allowing the user's eyes to trail off toward infinity. However, the right side is fairly distracting. I would suggest considering a different angle of approach so as to make the lockers on the left side the more dominant background element.
Subject: Subject is cute, and the body is well posed. The expression is somewhat lacking in emotion. Perhaps a more emotive expression could have furthered the main subject's presence in the photograph.
Technical (Colour, focus, and light): The black and white is a nice effect in this shot with good clarity on the child's garments. However, something feels very off around the face. Washed out and over-exposed. So that the facial features are diminished. This gives an almost eery quality to the shot, which doesn't quite fit with much of the surround sharp detail.
Also consider a zooming in to take this shot so the resulting background would be blurred. Though this might lose the clock/exit sign. One would have to consider the trade-off in the end result.
Creativity: Fun shot, with the play on the wrong size clothes. Though not unique to use over-sized garments, the choice and selection were good and create a fun feel.
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Summary: Not a bad shot, but it has several elements (mostly composition and loss of facial features that keep it from making it's full impact.
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It is my hope that these insights are helpful, and constructive. If you have any questions regarding this critique, please feel free to PM me. Also feel free to PM me with any feedback on this critique. And please remember to mark it "Helpful" if you found it so.
- Jason "The Saj"
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