Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by Ecce_Signum:
Greetings from Andi via the Critique Club

First Impression: Kudos to John and Mandy for doing what you asked Richard! Sadly (for me) things start to go downhill from there.

Composition: I feel John and Mandy are too central in the image and probably more importantly you didn't need to show so much of the lower regions and if John's left hand was a little higher on the waist you would have a less compromising image.

Subject: The idea of Adam and Eve was a good one with Adam taking the bite however, I don't think the final image gives that idea justice.

Technical:Focus should be sharper on your models and on my monitor Mandy's hair has no detail. They have different skin tones but neither seem to fit the scene you are tring to depict (or my idea of Adam and Eve). The overexposed background is a little distracting and you already mentioned the overexposed area on Mandy's left (not right) breast.

Final thoughts: A tough subject to shoot and sadly (for me) it was a good idea let douwn mainly by technicals and composition. Again, go John and Mandy for agreeing to this!

Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by IndigoButterfly:
Good concept. I like the expression on their faces.
Technically, the levels seem off a bit to me (darks are to dark) and overall not as sharp as I'd like. :)

Rail Road Relic
by rpethel

Comment by Panks:
the exposure is bit low and that has brought down the contrast as well.. I guess might be due to the grey and dull atmosphere (cloud)

Rail Road Relic
by rpethel

Comment by Teafran:
A great concept and a near perfect capture. The lighting could have been a little softer, but as it is, it works well. Both a technical and artistic success, this should place high for it's technical merit and artistic impact. The image is a little small to provide a good look at theinteresting details. This would have been a better image in grayscale or black and white. A good solid entry into the challenge.

Rail Road Relic
by rpethel

Comment by boone168:
I think your photo is too dark to assess.