Fiction Shelf
by rpethel

Comment by bmartuch:
I really like all the different dark colors.

Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by Ecce_Signum:
Greetings from Andi via the Critique Club

First Impression: Kudos to John and Mandy for doing what you asked Richard! Sadly (for me) things start to go downhill from there.

Composition: I feel John and Mandy are too central in the image and probably more importantly you didn't need to show so much of the lower regions and if John's left hand was a little higher on the waist you would have a less compromising image.

Subject: The idea of Adam and Eve was a good one with Adam taking the bite however, I don't think the final image gives that idea justice.

Technical:Focus should be sharper on your models and on my monitor Mandy's hair has no detail. They have different skin tones but neither seem to fit the scene you are tring to depict (or my idea of Adam and Eve). The overexposed background is a little distracting and you already mentioned the overexposed area on Mandy's left (not right) breast.

Final thoughts: A tough subject to shoot and sadly (for me) it was a good idea let douwn mainly by technicals and composition. Again, go John and Mandy for agreeing to this!

Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by tnun:
Oops, you got hammered. My first impression, however, was How sweet.

Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by virginia_brooke222:
this is just all wrong.

Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by IndigoButterfly:
Good concept. I like the expression on their faces.
Technically, the levels seem off a bit to me (darks are to dark) and overall not as sharp as I'd like. :)

Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by Equiessence:
I would never have imagined Adam with a farmer's tan ... unappetizing overall.

Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by kmusser:
Not bad I guess. I didn't like it and then I kinda did. I think the nudity part bothers me. A crop of their heads may have been a more subtle message regarding life and death. But that would be my taste and not yours.

Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by aliqui:
Adam has one heck of a farmer's tan!

Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by Jason_Cross:
Chicks...Nothing but trouble.

Life in Eden and the Death of Innocence
by rpethel

Comment by bjoern:
The idea made me smile, and I like how she looks at him, but technically there is a lot of room for improvement (colors, focus, crop).