Hello from the Critique Club-
I am a fan of your composition- I really like how the viewer focuses on her eye first, then directs their attention up the shaft of the umbrella to where she is looking. The only issue, however, is that it feels like I should be looking at the umbrella, but it isn’t really the focus of the shot. In fact, I’m left wondering what exactly is the focal point. Fashion typically wants you to focus on specific items that are being displayed, either that or the model themselves. While I think your composition here was pleasing, I don’t find that it fits with the subject matter of the challenge. There are some background elements that distract slightly, but I feel like the lack of a clear focus is more of an issue. You’ve got some orange leaking into the sky in the top left, and I’m not too sure what that is, as it should presumably be pure white. This photo works quite well as a candid portrait. I just feel like this was the wrong challenge for it. The gray portion of the border is a little too similar to the hues of the photo as well. I’d prefer something a bit more sharply contrasting.
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