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05/19/2004 09:02:07 PM |
Greetings from the Critique Club!
First of all, excellent job with the photo. It's a creative idea nicely executed. There are a few things though that I think would add to the picture.
Compostion:
This is the area I think you could improve the most. Like I said when I commented during the challenge, the strawberry on top of the kiwis is pretty muddy. I'm not sure you could have fixed this by thickening the strawberry slice as one commenter suggested. I think the strawberry would have turned out too dark, unless you used another light source, which might have gotten rid of the nice kiwi effect. I think the best bet would be to place the strawberry directly on the glass as well. Also, I might have moved the strawberry placement a little up and to the right to get the most out of the rule of thirds and add interest.
Technical: This was a very strong aspect of the picture. The focus is sharp throughout and the lighting excellent (minus muddy strawberry). The exposure also appears to be dead on.
Appeal: Typically I'm not a big fan of food pictures. They make me think of cheesy hotel art and mid-grade Italian restaurants. However, the creativity of this shot greatly enhances the appeal for me. That's just my two cents though.
Meeting the Challenge: It's creative, it attempts something new, and it's nothing like what you have already submitted. I think it works very well.
In closing, I think that if you would be willing to go through the pain of thinly slicing kiwi again to take another crack at this shot with a non-muddy strawberry (or maybe a more translucent fruit? Oranges? oooh... that could be cool) I think it would be worth your while.
Good job!
Amanda |
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05/16/2004 09:23:27 PM |
Composition: Subject Placement, Cropping, Background 4
Technical: Focus, Exposure, Lighting, Processing 4
Appeal: Is it Interesting, Motivating, Etc. 5
How well does it meet the challenge: 8
Total Averaged Rating(Rounded) 5
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05/16/2004 08:01:11 PM |
Composition: 8
Technical: 7
Appeal: 7
Challenge: 7
Rounded Average: 7
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05/15/2004 09:37:51 AM |
| Great use of backlighting and simple patterns. I would have taken away the kiwi slive directly behind the strawberry for the colors to come out more. |
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05/12/2004 09:08:48 PM |
| Beautiful, bright and colorful |
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05/11/2004 04:17:01 PM |
| Nicely abstracty (if thats a word?) |
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05/11/2004 03:28:07 PM |
| i love the backlighting on this picture |
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05/11/2004 02:14:57 PM |
| This may have been better with just the kiwi slices. The strawberry is just kind of sitting there detracting from the simple composition. I gave this a four. |
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05/11/2004 01:24:47 PM |
| This would have been made much better with a thicker slice of strawberry so the light wasn't shining through it. The non-translucent red color would have stuck out way better. |
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05/11/2004 12:47:26 PM |
| The backlighting really brings out the great color and detail of the kiwis. Although the red of the strawberry is muted a little because of it being on top of the green kiwi I think having it there adds interest and breaks up the repetition of the other fruit. I would be curious to see the strawberry being backlit directly amid the kiwis so that it was a lot stronger and vibrant like the others but that's mostly out of curiosity. And well done for cutting the slices so thin! |
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05/11/2004 10:32:13 AM |
| A very cool idea! The strawberry gets muddy on top of the kiwi's though. It would have been nice to have it overlap them instead of sitting on top. 7 |
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05/11/2004 03:57:35 AM |
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05/10/2004 01:13:12 AM |
| nice composition. I'd like to see the colors a little more vibrant. |
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05/10/2004 12:51:07 AM |
| this ia a unique shot, I like the light shining from below and the contrast in the colors. |
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05/10/2004 12:40:45 AM |
| Very well planned, well thought of, and well done. I am just wondering if you left the strawberry out ... how it would look ... maybe it will work that way too. The lighting is wonderful. |
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