RE: your forum request for comments.
I voted this a 5. For me, a 5 means it did something decent and was likely lacking elsewhere. Here, I like your idea, your premise, but it lacked punch, effect. There was no feeling of desperation here. Clawing, harder pushing, barely grasping the fence, tensed arm tendons- all of these imply hard times, struggle, and are all missing. I think a bit wider treatment would be better visually, but may or may not have been possible considering your location.
As a general aside, your focus does seem a bit deeper than it ought to be (backfocus). The fence that is more distant than the hand is sharp, but the hand is somewhat soft. This will be voted down by many on DPC, but I think the main issue was that it lacked strength of emotion (though, obviously I wasn't the only in thinking this, per the comment you received). |